Monday, May 17, 2010

here i am ...

trembling in the water of your love
i shiver in joy and new found need
my private pain becomes a concern
of yours as no one else as ever cared.

my heart rejoices and my flesh sighs...

toi

17 comments:

Shas said...

Beautiful.
Is it a submission triggered by need or want?

Anonymous Someone said...

Why do I find a pang of being cheated and left alone in your poems? Going through your recent poems gave me this impression. Correct me if I am wrong. You express little emotions with intricate details.

Regards
Blasphemous

brenda said...

Beautiful snippet of desire shared...love it!

Sandra (if) said...

fresh and sensuous...I like this!!

Tammie Lee said...

lovely poem of connection~

Toi said...

shas, hi...both: want and need. want if you
enjoy the act of submitting feeling helpless...
or/and need if you're inner being needs to
be submissive - is made to feel valid by
submitting.

Toi said...

hi ASB, um...I'm a melancholy poet, sometimes.

Toi said...

brenda, hi - thanks, you're so sweet.

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sandra, hi - thanks, for the kind words.

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there is an element of connection here,
tammi, thanks for seeing that.

The Write Girl said...

A romantic, beautiful, and heartfelt poem. Beautifully written.

Tumblewords: said...

Melancholy works...:)

Leo said...

very sensuos melancholic take.. romantic too!

Amity said...

what a beautiful poem Toi, sensous as Leo said!

Short Poems said...

Lovely, very well written.

Toi said...

such beautiful words for my poem, w.girl, thanks.

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i am that, tumblewords, thanks.

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thanks, leo for your sweet comment.

Toi said...

didn't notice the sensual aspect, thanks, A.

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thanks, short poems.

Rebecca said...

This is lovely and when one can find such a tender, caring treasure, one must hold it closely and secure it forever. Beautiful.

Toi said...

Nothing can compare, to find oneself cherished.
And you are so right, Rebecca, one must hold
this love close and secure.